Tuesday, November 9, 2010

Add A Lil' Somethin' Somethin'

Well, I got a wide array of responses for what I should do with the story. The best bet? Combine them if possible and keep on truckin'.


Eyes widening, Nick quickly scrabbles up what is left of the ravine, throwing as debris as possible below him. Rocks, logs, leaves, and dirt cascade onto the figure at the bottom of the creek. A SNARL stirs the forest.

The figure below glares up at Nick, lowers itself onto its haunches and rockets off the muddy creek bed. Flying through the air, fur matted down, ears lowered, and lips curled back, the figure grabs hold of Nick's ankle. Letting out a whimper, Nick thrashes at the beast below him. Flailing, his free foot catches the figure in the face, causing it to crash back down to the bottom of the ravine. With one final stretch, Nick grabs the top of the creek and pulls himself out.

Crumpling to his knees, Nick looks around the forest. Eyes darting from tree to tree, he runs towards a large birch off the trail and slumps against it. He listens. He hears nothing at first, but slowly heavy breathing is becoming louder and louder as the seconds pass by.

Edging around the side of the birch, Nick sees a shape amongst the trees on the trail, looking back and forth, nose in the air. Picking up a rock lying next to him, Nick throws it back through the forest towards the creek. The rock bounces off a tree and nestles itself in the fallen foliage. The figure is on the spot in a heartbeat, burrowing feverishly at the ground where the rock landed. Lunging to his feet, Nick stumbles back to the trail and continues his way up the mountain.

Slowing to a walk, Nick bends over, placing his hands on his knees, breathing heavily. Sweat drips off his forehead onto the leaves, PITTERING and PATTERING like rain.

Suddenly, Nick is thrown to the ground, sliding to the edge of the trail. The figure hunches where Nick just was. Crawling backwards away from the figure, Nick edges off the trail, sliding down a hill. Behind him stands an old cabin.

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Should Nick A) Scream for help  B) Run past the cabin  C) Barricade himself in the cabin  D) Fight the figure.

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